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Last weekend I showed a foreign friend around Jiangyin.We stayed in Ebizui Park for about half a day. Ebizui Park is one of the famous places of interest in Jiangyin.It attracts many visitors to the park to enjoy the beautiful view.Years ago some visitors didn’t know the importance of protecting the environment.They threw rubbish about and stepped on the grass.There have been great changes recently.It has been an ideal home for many birds.In order to make Jiangyin a better place to live,I will work hard…
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